First 250 Words Smash! #49 Most Wonderful Author: JayMost Evil Critique Master: AngeWorking Title: T

First 250 Words Smash! #49

Most Wonderful Author:Jay
Most Evil Critique Master: Ange
Working Title: The Burning Ones

As ashes of failed rebellion settle, she is the last breathing fighter. Her cage suspends four yards above ground in the middle of city square, too short for her spine to straighten and too narrow for her muscles to relax. Those who once believed in her dangle a short way above, their decay battering her weathered face. She has not spoken a word.

“That girl is made of titanium.” A Justitia whistles.

Twenty-two protons. Strongest lightweight metal. Corrosion-resistant. Highly flammable.

The town gathers to watch her time come. Cameras pan from rooftops, grasping every angle possible for the rest of the Utopia. Rows of soldiers bow as the Chairman arrives in robe and mask—no lens may taint his image.

Here’s some insight on prologues, especially if you’ve been considering one for your own story. Also, some thoughts on word choice and whether or not your words are making the right impression! Read the rest of the intro and what we have to say about it on the bloggity blog.

(And if you have no idea what this word smash thingy is, read this.)