#whwb project

Hey there! I was hoping if anybody would give me constructive criticism and feedback for the first chapter of the novel I’m finally writing and satisfied with writing?

The first chapter is 3000ish words, with a bolded line at 2000 words since this was a creative writing assignment. 

Please feel free to comment on the doc itself, or on this post, and please be as brutal as possible! You won’t hurt my feelings, and brutal honesty is necessary to get better at writing! It can be about anything at all: the dialogue, the characters, the flow, whether it bored you or not, etc!